tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2735549929072123374.post438804844815760790..comments2023-05-11T16:01:25.181+01:00Comments on Joey Ku: Unit 4: Story-telling: Screenplay draft 3Joey Kuhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06412738066836212690noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2735549929072123374.post-18541517532377507432012-02-16T17:46:38.671+00:002012-02-16T17:46:38.671+00:00Thanks Phil! Guess watching Tom and Jerry helps al...Thanks Phil! Guess watching Tom and Jerry helps alot!! :D Will add these final touches to the script!!<br /><br />Now Onwards!! ^_^Joey Kuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06412738066836212690noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2735549929072123374.post-90802685871454636052012-02-16T16:58:31.511+00:002012-02-16T16:58:31.511+00:00Yep - much improved, Joey - though in your script,...Yep - much improved, Joey - though in your script, you need to actually make a scene for the daydream sequences - so the audience sees exactly what the big fish is thinking - and this is a nice opportunity for some nice concept art (of the imagined bedroom and the lady-fishes) - I suggest you look at Siamese Fighting Fish for your lady-fish designs - very glamorous!<br /><br />You know, you could set it up so that beside the fisherman there is a primus stove, with a frying pan on it and maybe some slices of lemon on a plate beside it - so that, in a series of 'shock' cuts - the fish looks from the fisherman's face, to the frying pan, back to the fisherman licking his lips - just to make his fate absolutely clear! :)<br /><br />Well done for ironing out more of those wrinkles - onwards!tutorphilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11842833126210822641noreply@blogger.com